Eternal Love

When a spark ignites a flame
    The rains can come and douse it
When the rains ignite a flame
    Who can come and douse it?

When the fall strips bare the trees
    The spring can come and fill them
When the spring strips bare the trees
    Who can come and fill them?

When a foe inflicts a wound
    A friend can come and soothe it
When the friend inflicts a wound
    Who can come and soothe it?

When the world keeps you athirst
    Spirits can come and quench it
When the spirits let you thirst
    Who can come and quench it?

When the palace falls apart
    Your dream can help rebuild it
But when your dream falls apart
    Who can help rebuild it?

9 thoughts on “Eternal Love

  1. Satish (boss), Avinash (Ghirni), Abhay also called it. Here’s Abhay’s guess in devanagari:

    चिंगारी कोई भड़के तो सावन उसे बुझाए
    सावन जो अगन लगाए उसे कौन बुझाए

  2. Update to the last six lines for smoother flow:

    When the spirits let you thirst
    Who can come and quench it?

    When the palace falls apart
    Your dream can help rebuild it
    But when your dream falls apart
    Who can help rebuild it?

    Used to be:

    When spirits keep you athirst
    Who can come and quench it?

    When the palace falls apart
    Your dreams can help rebuild it
    When Dream-Temple falls apart
    Who can help rebuild it?

  3. After the first stanza there is nothing really new in this song by way of poetry. You can write 200 more of them and yet no new emotions or ideas would surge out of it. I’m speaking from the point of view of poetry. The theme should build up to some happy surprise which is absent here. Sorry.

  4. I agree that it’s pretty ordinary from that point of view – both the original and the translation. To lift it higher, need to introduce abstraction and some diversity of format, but then it will deviate from the original – may be if I get some time.

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